Thursday, July 2, 2009

Deluded


Your pain
doesn’t really
distinguish
you
I see you sitting there
meditating
on your

angst,
so sure
that your life’s
absurdity
sets you
apart
You are satisfied,
secure
in your

separateness
But allow me to
rupture
the skin of
your self-satisfaction:
I too feel the

break
between body
and brain
and the suspicion
that my umbrella
holds no
protection
from rain

This week's readwritepoem prompt was to use the above photo by nwolc.

10 comments:

  1. Fantastic finish on this one. And the tone is excellent.

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  2. ha! I love it, Erin--wonderfully worth the wait!

    and I love the form you used,too. It looks so cool on the page, dripping down like the sacrcasm!

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  3. Wonderful. I know a few people I would love to send this to...

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  4. Oh, Erin, I love this! Good lord, what a bizarre photo and what you pulled out from studying it is absolutely fantastic.
    I gush, but it's honest gushing.

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  5. Hello Erin,

    I saw the photo prompt at RWP
    but never in a million years
    would a poem such as this
    have come to me!

    Amazing!

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  6. Thanks for the positive feedback! I'm glad the tone came through and seems effective. The ending is my favorite part, so glad that worked. I had no idea where this prompt would take me, so the journey was fun.

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  7. This piece speaks to a lot of the feelings I think are hard to express between elders and those making their way through their teenage years and young adulthood. Isn't that how I felt? What changed for me that I am now at this place? I really love where you ended up, having knowledge of your inspirational departure point.

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